|Rewriting Bloated Sentences||
This quiz was prepared by Michel Foley, a student in Professor Karyn Hollis's Tutor Training course at Villanova University.
Directions: Rewrite the sentence to eliminate the "inflated language," language that is overly formal, pompous, and wordy. When you are finished with each sentence (or, if you wish, wait until you've done them all), click on "Grammar's Suggested Rewrite," which will reveal how we would rewrite the sentence. Your sentence is apt to look quite different from our sentence, but as long as both sentences are leaner, more efficient models of the bloated original, we've accomplished our purpose. Don't cheat by looking at Grammar's Version first.
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Guide to Grammar and Writing